Forever After
After all our years have settled like dust
All along our attic floor we gather,
Along with all our dreams, to find a broom
With which to stir these storm clouds up and find
Which one is mine or yours or ours and discover
One so bright and clear to claim together
So that our present, past are thus revealed:
That after seeking, weaving, we find ourselves. Together,
After all.
For X & me,
September, 1986
(After finishing “Same Time, Next Year”, again)
Ah, X, whose name I won’t reveal. (She is the same woman in Rejoice, which I’ll post soon I just posted.) Same Time, Next Year was our movie, paralleling how we floated into and out of each others lives for almost 40 years until, well, bridges were burned. I swear she soaked the decks in kerosene, but I lit the match. There will forever remain a bitter taste of soot in my mouth when I recall what we had, what I thought we had, and didn’t.
I’m happy with the scheme I came up with to link the lines together on this one. Did you catch it?
(Old “Poems”: I’ve been writing these little ditties, verses, near-poems since high school. Many are pedestrian; others are real stinkers. Some I still love. I worry that they’ll expire with the inevitable demise of my hard drive, so I decided I’ll put them out here, in the harsh, blistering, stinging, way-too-public cloud to live forever, for good or shame. (To write and self-publish is to court shame. Oh, the hubris!))
I didn’t notice but now I do! And the fact that I didn’t speaks to just how well you wove that pattern in. And the repetition creates a beautiful cadence.
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PS: you really shouldn’t play with matches.
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Thank you, Laura, faithful reader. It tickles me that you didn’t consciously notice my line-linking scheme at first read. That’s what I was aiming for. (And I never play with matches. Sometimes, though, a (figurative) cleansing conflagration is best for all.)
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Not until you noted that there was a linking device, did I realize it. Went back for a second read. Very effective. You are keeping us on our toes.
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Heh. See my response to Laura above.
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Achieved your desired blaze of glory.
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kind of sad, but yet sweet.
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Thanks, Audrey. I agree. After all these years, this one feels like it’s acquired a kinda verdigris.
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It took me awhile to see what you did, as well. Skillfully done. Aren’t these word games fun????
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I had to go back and look too, but I did see it then. I’m not sure what the words “forever After” mean.
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I think I was trying to get the reader to recall the fairy tale ending line, “And they lived happily ever after.”, but too many years, beers, and Cuba Libres have come between me and that young man who wrote this to be sure.
Thanks for reading, Mary!
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You’re smart and witty. I am enjoying reading your blogs tonight.
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He is smart and witty and has kept it up for at least the past 6 years. I don’t know how he was before that. Someone else will have to vouch for him.
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This poem is so lovely, actually, that I’m jealous!!!!
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